|Selected SciFaiku (1996)|
The following are some SciFaiku selections with commentary. Enjoy!
Black ships fill the morning sky
Terror grips my soul
Like a primal scream, this seems to capture some central human archetype of fear. The 2nd line is the key, the stark image of terror. The final line puts it in context, though I might have tried to capture the feeling of terror through describing action if possible (though certainly no better line comes to mind -- this one seems to have captured the feeling quite well).
Walls of steel,
Emptiness and cold death
of the last heartbeat
Both sad and profound, this poem prophesies a cataclysmic end to a universe and does it with a direct personal reference. I love it.
Starship spirals inwardly
Blue photons escape
My dreams are filled with
Thoughts of you.
Sad. Beautiful. Space travel is like this.
catches at my breath
as I gaze back at home.
I can feel this bubble tickling at my throat. This is immediacy at its best.
Death to the alien race
Watch them die
Anonymous achieves a humorously shocking attitude. I love the directness, in fact, the lack of subtlety in this particular poem. It dramatically stereotypes a genre and a whole world-view.
Starrise in the south-- crystals stitched on unknown star-scapes
-- Michael R. Collings
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